Feedback From Updated Treatment

• They found that this short film seemed to come together a little more and also make more sense to them where they had found the old one a little questionable.
• We were told that our plot was good and as long as we made it clear and understandable they thought that our film would come along nicely together.
• One thing we were told was to use the college and its different locations more so that it is not all set in one specific area.
• We also received feedback to make the scenes which we will be shooting in the forest as a flashback seem like it was definitely done on a different day.

Updated Treatment

Plot Change

We have decided to change the plot of our short film as our prior idea had a lot of hole which we recognised when we began to map out individual scenes and come up with a storyboard. We are however keeping the genre the same as a thriller and the characters being all female, yet the plot is now different. We will be doing a new treatment presenting our new overall ideas and then continue with the rest of pre-production.